Friday, September 18, 2009

Wordzzle on dreams

Over at Views from the Raven's Nest, a Wordzzle challenge is posted weekly. The basic idea is to use all 10 words provided in a short paragraph (plus mini challenge words if you can). More information can be found here.



This week's words are (dangerous, engine, sullenly, bespoke, evergreen, bauble, medicine, freight, destined, tinsel) with a mini challenge of (carbon, feelers, outright, ballet, fizzing).

She watched the freight train pulling away, the engine gaining speed, and she thought about running after it and catching a ride. Sure, it could be dangerous, but that carbon-burner was headed to Tinsel Town. Even the thought of it bespoke of lights, dazzling lights, and sounds of a town always alive. Of trinkets and baubles. She had always thought that she was destined for the ballet. It felt like the right path to her. She'd mentioned it casually to her mother once, nothing too outright or anything, putting out feelers to see how she'd take it. She hadn't taken it well at all, saying that they could barely afford medicine and there was no way they were taking a risk like that. And so here she was, still stuck among the evergreens in some no-name town. As she sullenly watched the last cars of the train rounding the corner out of sight she felt her dreams fizzing again.

8 comments:

  1. Fantastic! I got a real sense of frustrated dreams in this piece and the words fit in beautifully.

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  2. Oh. My. God. That was awesome! I am Super Impressed!

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  3. Great story. Great use of the words. It was everything a wordzzle should be.

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  4. Wonderful! I love it when someone uses the words so concisely and tells a great story at the same time. Welcome back.

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  5. Welcome back from the dragons.
    You are a breath of fresh air.
    All the words, well used, in an interesting story that is short.
    We think your perfect.

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  6. Excellent wordzzle. You used all the words so effectively and in such a short piece of writing. Bravo.

    My Wordzzle is HERE.

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  7. Wow. I admire the way you manage to keep it so compact and still make a good story of it.

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  8. It was a nice story with a lot of feeling in it. I could picture it all in my mind.

    Stephen from Scottsdale, Arizona, USA
    http://stephen-has-spoken.blogspot.com/

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